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    dots Submission Name: For the Peacedots
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    Author: TryingToHoldOn
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 7/7/3
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFor the Peacedots
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    For the peace the children cry,
    As wars rage by and by.
    For the peace tears are shed,
    For the peace and for the dead.

    The scarlet blood dripping down,
    Marks the streets and kills the joy.
    The terrorized screams of another shot,
    Echo through deserted streets.

    For the peace the mothers cry,
    As more sons die and die.
    For the peace is our cry.
    But why then is war considered alright?

    A father dead,
    A brother gone.
    And for what, but another gun?

    For the peace is the cry,
    Held on up as generations die,
    For the peace we march back on.
    And for the peace we hear the death gong.

    The blood and tears mingle together,
    And what is lost is lost forever.
    For the peace the children cry,
    And still, guns are raised higher then high.




    Submitted on 2008-01-27 17:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First of all, I would like to welcome you to Elite Skills.

    Wow, this is really good. They always tell me to say something other than it was a good poem, but that was a good poem. One small critism I would have to give you is how the rhyme scheme goes. You start out rhyming, then stop, then start rhyming again.

    But all in all, it was really well written. I think you should try free verse. You have a really good idea. I don't read poems about war and how everyone is killing each other that often. Your poem was a nice change.

    So you should try free verse. Thanks for the read and I hope you try free verse.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      if in exasperation we cry as poor slaves to sin why should peace give its blessing when it is thoughted that guns have more power than reasoning. Yeah, we all break with faith since we consider the evil one having more of an answer to our problems than the power of love.
    Down with war, treat evil as treason. Rise up,O you people of God, love is the rightful reason.
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]



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