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    dots Submission Name: some mirrors are freezingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssome mirrors are freezingdots
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    some mirrors are freezing
    & the image looking back
    is where the poem appears.
    legless & stretching
    towards the sky.

    my lover,
    i am skinless in the cold
    & turning old
    where the creases form
    around my cracking edge.

    heaven is in the details
    & i am blind right now
    stepping off bridges
    into the wild
    of the moon.

    are you the stalking forms
    of birds and trees behind me?
    are you the melting flowers
    of my tongue
    so sweetly sung?

    my breath is golden
    & i am inside
    some soft version of you.
    i miss the fire in the mirror
    where your face appeared.




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