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    dots Submission Name: Envy Anddots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 354/430/184
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 136
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    dotsEnvy Anddots
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    You don't hope for anything
    [la la lover un
    contended.]
    And I don't trust in anyone
    (it's worth a thousand words but I just have two.)

    So let's make a deal
    Let's trade off

    let's make make make
    let's [un]destroy

    Because my heart isn't slowing down
    [It just - - - - - - - gives up.]
    Giveitup.

    And your conclusions
    - - - - - - - will not fade
    [Giveitup giveitup]
    And the other side
    is looking awfully
    is making me awfully
    green




    Submitted on 2008-01-27 20:04:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the fact the this poem is so unique. I think that it's very well put together although the end is a little confusing. It all flows together really good until you get to this part... is looking awfully
    is making me awfully
    green...
    I don't know if the first part is suppost to say awfull instead of awfully, but the way it is now dosent really flow together. But besides that I think that it's very deep, and somthing that I can really relate to.
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel90 | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this piece =]
    "You don't hope for anything.
    And I don't trust in anyone"
    it's familiar && I can relate to it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by sum12luv | [ Reply to This ]


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