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    dots Submission Name: Lying Beside Youdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 964

       I just thought it might be pretty...thinking about how it is to lie beside someone...

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    dotsLying Beside Youdots

    Lying here beside you, in your bed
    There's no place on earth I'd rather be
    Our fingers interlocked, I gaze into your eyes
    And you look straight into me

    Eyes closed, my fingers trace the outline
    Of a face more familiar than my own
    Every moment with you is an eternity
    But when I open my eyes, it's gone

    Limbs entertwined, it's all on the line
    The silence strengthens the ties
    No words are spoken, but all is known
    As you make love to me with your eyes

    The scent of your skin could drive me mad
    The warmth melts even the iciest parts
    I could lay here and never even touch you
    But you'd still have stolen my heart

    Lying here beside you, in your bed
    Hoping that you'll never have to go
    Your lips turn up in their perfect smile
    And I love you more than you'll ever know

    Submitted on 2008-01-27 20:17:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nicely written. Is this guy for real, or just a fantasy? He seems awesome, if he is real.
    Just me now, but I think it could use some punctuation (sp?).

    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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