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    dots Submission Name: My Perfect Loverdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 842
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 1224

       There really is nothing...I just needed to write

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    dotsMy Perfect Loverdots

    I want you to touch me
    To explore every inch of my skin
    I want to do the same to you
    Then, I want to do it again

    I want you to hold me
    To be the one who will never fail
    To wrap me up in one shining moment
    When I'm in my own personal hell

    I want you to kiss me
    To consume me with your lips
    I want to throw my arms around your neck
    I want your hands upon my hips

    I want you to know me
    Body, mind, and soul
    You can be the one who gets inside
    And promises to never let go

    I want you inside me
    When you breathe out, I breathe in
    I want to be the object of desire
    Your own perfect sin

    I want you to love me
    To say those words I long to hear
    And when I try to pull away from this
    I want you to bring me near

    I want you to want me
    To take me in like air
    I've never asked for all that much
    Just that you be the one who cares

    I want you to touch me
    With the hands of my perfect lover
    You're the only one I desire
    And I'll never need another.

    Submitted on 2008-01-27 20:17:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn theres alot of passion in this. I almost dont want to comment so it'll stay up on that "need comments" board longer but I gotta tell you, I loved it. At first I thought i'd just be a simple rhyming kinda deal, but for some reason I felt the exact longing it describes.
    I should go think about that.
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]

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