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    dots Submission Name: The Eyedots
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    Author: kingsley
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 100/59/46
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       If you ever want to sleep just take a second to think about what the rest of the world is doing


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    dotsThe Eyedots
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    I stand close to the hour of silence
    watching my world fall under a spell;
    only the wind and the cricket stand
    as the world goes to sleep.

    I dream of places far off.
    The places of no spells
    where reality embraces magic
    and starts a new culture.

    I stand with the cousin of death
    but i haven't the courage to ask of his cousin.
    I can hardly wait to bid him good-bye
    and take my leave to embrace the rising eye.





    Submitted on 2008-01-28 10:52:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      An enjoyable piece about sleep and dreams. I thought it was a little short, especially for the topics you covered. Felt like you just barely scratched the surface of the substance of this poem, I was just left wanting to know more. Also, you might want to try and not use cousin in both the first and second line of the third stanza to refer to death, just a thought.
    ~bkj
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]


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