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    dots Submission Name: Upon the bittersweetdots
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    Author: armand
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 1173/1189/206
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Religious
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    Description:
       Part one of three

    Hey what can I say I like things in threes


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    dotsUpon the bittersweetdots
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    And I stand in the shadows of giants and men
    preaching the words that cast a holy light
    in the name of the Christ
    we taste this bittersweet life
    in which we suffer

    The desires they feel so right
    in the minds that think alike
    under the grace of the holy light
    in the name of the Christ
    we waste this bittersweet life
    for a chance to suffer




    Submitted on 2008-01-28 13:59:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey this piece was really profound in and unique i have to admit. I had to mull it over a few times to really get the impact but enjoyed it more and more each time! This was brilliant in a sense and also very thought provoking! I loved it in it's entirety. This is good but i see you have deleted most of your works :-( so how can i read them?

    Ha anyways did you know that Shawn means "God is graceful"? Just a random thought i felt like throwing in hehe.

    Anyways thanks for sharing this great read with us!

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-09-09 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      i look forward to the second and third parts.
    this piece here sets a very good foundation for the parts to come.

    the lack of punctuation works in favour of this piece. especially


    in the name of the Christ
    we waste/taste

    because of the way the christ line follows on from the one before it but creates a new platform for the following lines and the way they are subtly changed upon repetition is brilliant.

    as always your analysis of the situation is well founded and your inclusion of christ in this piece is completely on the mark.


    of giants and men... i feel i have read this line somewhere before
    no... mice and men is the line i think...?
    hmmm... i dont know... confused...

    the implications of your words and also the changings of them messes with my head completely... preaching in the name of for a chance to suffer... grace in the name of wasted...

    im not making any sense but i really want to read the next two pieces! please tell me when theyre up coz i dont want to miss them!
    | Posted on 2008-02-14 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. This has the old armand touch to it, with the whole religion scene. Whether you seem to be for god or against him in your writes, you always seem to have some sort of a mystery that makes the reader want to keep reading no matter their particular beliefs.


    It's good to see you writing again
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, it read well and spurred my curiousity to read more. My favorite lines were
    "we waste this bittersweet life
    for a chance to suffer"
    a very apt description of life, but i would think must suffer in order to know joy(which is what I feel I waste my life seeking, but it's funny how often that leads to suffering). Also enjoyed the allusion to the life of Christ which is symbolic of what you described. Looking forward to the other parts
    ~bkj
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]


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