Upon the bittersweet -------------------------------------------
And I stand in the shadows of giants and men
preaching the words that cast a holy light
in the name of the Christ
we taste this bittersweet life
in which we suffer
The desires they feel so right
in the minds that think alike
under the grace of the holy light
in the name of the Christ
we waste this bittersweet life
for a chance to suffer
i look forward to the second and third parts.
this piece here sets a very good foundation for the parts to come.
the lack of punctuation works in favour of this piece. especially
in the name of the Christ
we waste/taste
because of the way the christ line follows on from the one before it but creates a new platform for the following lines and the way they are subtly changed upon repetition is brilliant.
as always your analysis of the situation is well founded and your inclusion of christ in this piece is completely on the mark.
of giants and men... i feel i have read this line somewhere before
no... mice and men is the line i think...?
hmmm... i dont know... confused...
the implications of your words and also the changings of them messes with my head completely... preaching in the name of for a chance to suffer... grace in the name of wasted...
im not making any sense but i really want to read the next two pieces! please tell me when theyre up coz i dont want to miss them!
I love this. This has the old armand touch to it, with the whole religion scene. Whether you seem to be for god or against him in your writes, you always seem to have some sort of a mystery that makes the reader want to keep reading no matter their particular beliefs.
I liked this, it read well and spurred my curiousity to read more. My favorite lines were
"we waste this bittersweet life
for a chance to suffer"
a very apt description of life, but i would think must suffer in order to know joy(which is what I feel I waste my life seeking, but it's funny how often that leads to suffering). Also enjoyed the allusion to the life of Christ which is symbolic of what you described. Looking forward to the other parts
~bkj
Submission Name: Upon the bittersweet
