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    dots Submission Name: Love (Nevermore)dots
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    Author: Flynn
    ASL Info:    24/M/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 74/123/48
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLove (Nevermore)dots
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    God save me.
    I need a way to make it
    Iím sick and tired, canít fake it
    Settle down me heart letís go back
    Take it from the start.

    Itís easy sometimes to forget
    Iím the one she loved
    That once upon a time she thought I was above
    And the dove once flown away is gone again
    All cause I gave in to sin.

    Iím alone.
    Iím sick and tired of this life
    Iím lonesome with this one knife
    Settle down me heart, letís take it
    From the start

    Itís easy sometimes to forget
    That youíre worth all the pain
    That somebody somewhere is feeling just the same
    And that the rain is not the rain you made alone
    When youíre crying on the phone.

    Save me, Iím scared
    Canít run cause Iím no where
    Canít find the strength to make it
    Without my heart, it is gone, it is torn in two
    Where can, I go?
    I just, donít know
    Everything I loved is broken,
    Fell upon the floor
    To be truthful nevermore.

    Said I love you, nevermoreÖ




    Submitted on 2008-01-28 14:07:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very beautiful piece...very evocative of how you're feeling at this point in time.

    I can't help but worry bout you though too...so if you need to talk, I can give you my email.
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there,
    Ok, first thing's first, it seems as though the 'the' in the second line of the second stanza should be 'that' or completely omitted?

    I like how honest you are in these lyrics. Like for example
    in this line "All cause I gave in to sin." or when you say
    "Save me, I'm scared" I think they personalize the write and makes it stronger.

    I also love this part "Itís easy sometimes to forget
    That youíre worth all the pain
    That somebody somewhere is feeling just the same
    And that the rain is not the rain you made alone
    When youíre crying on the phone." It speaks volumes, and it has somewhat of a sobering effect if you will (at least on me)

    I noticed that you're previous commenter was concerned, and I hope that you are ok.
    (and I thought I'd just mention that I love your picture)

    Love and peace
    *bas*



    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by bas | [ Reply to This ]
      Flynneh,

    Are you ok? I mean the piece was beautiful, but I sense something...more. I don't know what, and it makes me hurt for you...I remember the first time we talked, you seemed so happy...and now...you seem to be the complete opposite. I loved this work it told a sad story and was very much well written. If you ever need to talk; I guess to someone you don't know, that won't judge etc, feel free. If need be I'll give you my email address. Happy faces!

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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