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    dots Submission Name: Down Againdots
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    Author: Piper
    ASL Info:    17/ Female/ Europe
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 31/41/27
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 137
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 638



    Description:
       Today I got really hurt by something that was said to me, so as soon as I came home, I just wrote this. Helped me vent out.


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    dotsDown Againdots
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    If someone dares to bring me down
    By his words and his deeds,
    I'll try to smile and stick around.
    For I know which way I chose.

    And I wouldn't do different
    If I could rewind time,
    What I did, is what I want
    And my mistakes are only mine.

    There are people, ready to hold me
    When your words make me cry,
    And there are ones willing to help me,
    When I think it's so easy to die.

    So go ahead, make me fall,
    But I'll bounce back up
    There are people who really love me
    And they are above you all.




    Submitted on 2008-01-28 14:08:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love it, I got to admit that.

    However, there are some lines which can use some adjustment, you know, to make it sounds better. For example the whole first stanza, I find it kind a weak.

    But as the poem continues, the reading gets more interesting.

    Love it!
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by iLLeGaL pLaYeR | [ Reply to This ]



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