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    dots Submission Name: Bleeding Heartdots
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    Author: BeautifulSoul
    ASL Info:    17/F/In
    Elite Ratio:    7.71 - 52/22/16
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 134
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 498



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    dotsBleeding Heartdots
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    You cause me so much pain,
    and nothings the same.
    Yet still I love you,
    and can't accept that we are through.
    With broken wings I fall,
    your angelic eyes watch it all.
    I grab for your hand just out of reach,
    is this the heartbreak that so many preach?
    This pain that will not end,
    that will not allow my broken heart to mend.
    But even if you cause my bleeding heart to cry,
    I'll wait for you till the day I die.




    Submitted on 2008-01-28 14:14:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think its pretty much said that love is trully painful but we still wanna hang on to the good times that we use to have..
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by Eshia | [ Reply to This ]
      A very melancholic piece. The feeling was well delivered. But some of your phrases were too stretched.

    "With broken wings I fall,
    your angelic eyes watch it all."

    I love those lines. Well written :D
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by iLLeGaL pLaYeR | [ Reply to This ]


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