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    dots Submission Name: Never Cried....dots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    19/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 283/317/92
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 169
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 507



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       I was setting here last night just fine. talking to some friends... just fine and i shut everything off and went to go to bed and i felt empty... i felt emotionless... no matter what i did to my self i couldnt cry. i dont understand why i just couldnt cry.........


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    dotsNever Cried....dots
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    She just set there and waited
    Bled but never cried,
    It stung but she never died

    Kept on cutting
    Sigh, Sigh
    Never cried, never cried

    Set and waited
    Life passed her by
    All the time she wondered
    Why she was alive

    Just set and bled
    Day and night
    Always silence

    No more fights
    Waite and bleed
    Thinks of her life
    Always bleeds
    NEVER DIES.........................




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      It was a very good poem... lots of emotion and drama... i really liked it you can always bleed on be keri : )
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by shygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very emotional poem. It spoke very clearly of your feelings, but yet it wasn't just the "standard" time of poem. It had a nice quality about the way it was written and the emotions were clearly felt there. On the last paragraph though did you mean to say

    "No more fights
    Waited and bleed"

    because it says

    "No more fights
    Waite and bleed"

    I didn't know if you meant to have that 'e' on the end or not. But, it was a nice poem. I enjoyed it. I hope you get out that cry you needed.

    Good job.
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      It was ok but you could of said a lot more. But I feel your pain because I also never cry, but I somtimes wish I could die.
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate it when I can't cry. When I have nothing but emptiness inside, I hope you feel better.
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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