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    dots Submission Name: shelf puppet...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 477
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    Description:
       many spelling mistakes really didn't have time to take time so offer and sp. andvice and any comments...


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    dotsshelf puppet...dots
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    so this is it
    the act that never ends
    the repeatative play i can't leave
    everything surrounds
    and sufficates
    wheres my excape
    over and over
    this play is written
    in the blood of ancient times
    so end this marriment
    and end me in the making
    i won't be your puppet
    nor shall i claim you as mine
    over and over and over again
    this is getting to old for me
    so lets not play pretend
    wipe the dust off these shelves
    and live for me....




    Submitted on 2008-01-28 19:56:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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