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    dots Submission Name: never understand...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsnever understand...dots
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    so you'll never understand
    you'll never get me
    is this all i am to you
    a puppet
    a toy
    use me abuse me
    then throw me away
    just a quick review of my past
    you press replay
    and its all starting again
    form start to finish
    the pain the heartache
    and so on as we all know the ending
    to this dramatic play
    slit my wrists
    bathe in my blood
    kill me softly
    and say i mean nothing
    hurt me please
    heres the blade
    i'll even push myself on its end
    i'm sick of this
    sick of the way i can't excape
    sick of the ways you hurt me
    sick of this life...




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      I have felt this way alot in my life with many men in my past and at one point started blaming myself for being ignorant and so damn trusting..Because I always ended up hurt..
    Very good write. I felt the emotions running off the page as I read it..

    Keep up the good work!

    Thanks!
    Totojane
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      ive once felt like this when i was younger, and it was scary because you never knew if you were going to be able to feel emotions like most people or even feel any emotion at all. i like this because its not long and dragged on like most of these types of poems are. goodjob
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      An outcry against what most people find in a relationship is what i find when reading this. It flows quite well and it shows lots of emotion. My only critiques are that your vocabulary lacked the amount of emotion put into this and did not allow you to express to the fullest that which you had to say. other than that it was a good read and i look forward to reading more from you.
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]


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