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    dots Submission Name: Feed my pains, before hunger gainsdots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 75/140/80
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 173
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    dotsFeed my pains, before hunger gainsdots
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    Murmured words of hers
    from furs surrounding
    her coats hood swears
    up and down
    this is
    misery

    Don't worry me,
    empathetically craving
    change from
    me

    Please,
    my emperor, my
    Constantine
    lead me to my becoming world.

    I've got my body curled.
    Surrendered myself unto her.

    If we were to ever reoccur
    apart of the others - the contemplators
    a perfered breed from out our herd..

    Then my eyes open wide
    would not ever be considered
    by person to person.

    I'm starving for their affection




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