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    dots Submission Name: Chi Chapter 1dots
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    Author: FinalConflict
    Elite Ratio:    0.89 - 0/0/12
    Words: 814
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 98
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 5700



    Description:
       This is the first chapter of the manga I am writing.
    As you will noticed it is written in Script Format because it is a manga.
    Enjoy, Comments encouraged and appreciated.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsChi Chapter 1dots
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    CHAPTER 1: Start

    shows a building in the middle of nowhere.
    Shows the inside of the building with about 15 men around a large table in chairs.
    Man #1: Where's Hellsing? Shouldn't he of finished the job by now?
    Man #2: He always take too slow, likes to play with his opponent before killing them.
    Man #3: That man, he can't just--
    Hellsing: Can't what?
    Man #3 freezes up.
    Man #1: You kill them?
    Hellsing: Of course.
    Man#2: The plate on your face...
    Man #2: What Happened?
    Hellsing: They put up a good fight.
    Man#1: Didn't he have a son?
    Hellsing: Yeah. He should arrive to the burning house any minute now.
    Man#3: What now?
    Hellsing: We wait...
    Man#4: Wait?
    Hellsing: Yes. We wait.
    Hellsing: Wait for him to seek training at Yakan. And then our spies will decide what to do from there.
    Man#2: Then what?
    Hellsing: We eliminate every single person who stands up to us.
    Shows everyone at the table jumping up: YEAH!
    Hellsing: My main target....
    (shows Masashi): Masashi Oriya...
    shows medium sized village.
    Masashi walks into bar.
    Masashi: Hey
    Bar Keeper: Get Out.
    Masashi: Why don't you?
    Bar Keeper: I own the place.
    Masashi has that “I'm an idiot” look on him: Shut up...
    Bar Keeper shuts off the TV
    Masashi thought: Was that?
    Masashi runs out of the bar.
    (shows Masashi running up to his home, in ashes)
    A man walks up to him: Is this your home?
    Masashi nods
    Man: I'm sorry, son. There were two dead inside.
    Masashi eyes are wide.
    Man: It was said a Chi Lord did this. With a black plate on the right side of his face.
    Masashi: You know his name?
    Man: I'm sorry son I don't. But ask around, someone might know.
    Masashi walks away.
    Man: Where are you going?
    Masashi: Yakan. To get stronger....and find whoever did this...
    The man walks away.
    His face starts to melt off.
    Man: Ah. Masashi Oriya. This should be interesting. Yes, very interesting.
    (Shows Chapter One Page)

    (shows Masashi walking off with a small pack)
    (shows Masashi walking again)
    someone walks up to him
    Young Girl: Sashi! Sashi! Where are you going?
    Masashi puts hand on her head.
    Masashi: I'm going away for a while? But I Promise I'll be back Celia.
    Masashi smiles.
    Celia: I'm gonna miss you!
    Masashi: It's okay. I promise I'll stop by each day that I'm in town
    Celia pouts: Hmph.
    Masashi laughs.
    Masashi: See ya around.
    Masashi walks off.
    Celia watches him as he goes.
    Masashi waving to Bar Keep.
    Masashi: See Ya.
    Bar Keep: Yeah.
    (walks out of the village)
    shows him walking in the desert for a page.
    Man comes out of the ground.(2 boxes)
    Sand falling off him(2 boxes)
    Man: Ah, so Oriya...you start your journey now...
    Man goes back into the sand.(3 or 4 boxes)
    Masashi looks back.
    (shows miles of sand): Nothing.
    Masashi starts walking again: Wonder how long it's been.
    (tries to take a drink)
    (all of the canteens are empty)
    Masashi: Long enough it seems.
    Everything gets blurry:
    Masashi wobbles: Whoa...
    Everything is more blurry.
    Masashi throws up.
    Masashi: Ah...
    Masashi slowly closing his eyes(3 boxes)
    Masashi collapsing in the sand.
    Black background: What happened?
    Black background: Where am I?
    His eyes ease open(3 boxes)
    Masashi jumps back.
    Shows 8 or 9 people in the room crowding around him.
    Little Girl: He's awake!
    A man walks in, about 40 years old.
    Man: Oh. Good. We were starting to think you had died on us.
    Masashi: Where am I?
    Man: Kissimmee.
    Masashi: Where?
    Man: Our land we own here, we called it Kissimmee, after the family
    Masashi: Well..um…
    Man: Call me Aston
    Masashi: Okay, Aston. I'm Masashi Oriya.
    Aston: Aston Kissimmee. Pleased to meet you.
    Masashi: What ha--
    Aston: You passed out in the desert. Lucky for you I found you and brought you back.
    Masashi: Well thank you.
    Aston: Anytime.
    Masashi: I rather it not happen again, but I get your point.
    someone yelling from outside: Hey!
    Aston: In here.
    Person about Masashi's age walks in.
    Aston: This is my son, Makoto.
    Masashi gets up.
    Masashi: Hey.
    Makoto: Hey.
    Long silence.
    Aston: Well this is awkward who wants lunch!?
    Makoto: I'll pass. I'm heading out to Yakan soon.
    Masashi: Me too actually.
    Makoto: For the Academy?
    Masashi: You too then?
    Makoto: Yep. You’re a first year aren’t you?
    Masashi: Yeah. I take it then you’ve been there before?
    Makoto: Yep. This is my second year.
    Masashi: Ah.
    Makoto: Why are you going?
    Masashi: My trainers…well…
    Masashi looks down.
    Makoto: Gotcha.
    Masashi: So, you use Chi yet?
    Makoto: Of course. You?
    Masashi: Not very well, can barely start a little spark.
    Makoto: Well why don't we have a little match. See who's stronger? Then we'll head out.
    Masashi: Okay.
    (shows them standing in the field)
    Makoto: Father.
    Aston: Begin!




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