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    dots Submission Name: Room 311dots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 651
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    Description:
       This is about my suite at college. There are four of us girls in the suite, and there are only three rooms. Each room always has music, and you can always tell who's in what room by the music playing. Since it was advised that if I wanted to read happiness, I should write it first, I hope you will not be too hard on my writing. Thanks and enjoy!


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    dotsRoom 311dots
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    Music from one room,
    flows into the others.
    Four of us, three tunes,
    mixing and dancing together.

    Loud rock and roll from the left,
    Soft country from the right,
    and the eerieness of techno,
    blasts in the center room.

    Strangers walk by the suite,
    not knowing anyone inside,
    but gaining a little insight,
    by the music, and it's tide.

    Three different persons,
    oh, three completly different souls,
    but what about the fourth,
    the mute one, the one in the cold?

    No music from a source,
    not a touch of a human thought,
    but do not worry,
    She has an i-pod.

    And just as all these songs,
    mixing and floating together,
    so do the three girls,
    Truly, best friends forever.




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      What happened to it being a happy poem? I love how you always try, but something always slips in at the end to make you think. Why are only three of them best friends forever? And I thought you didn't get along with your roomies? I am so confused...*runs away and hides*
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      You have built a sence of friendship and comradre that makes me feel that though there are differences they are all overcome by a mutual respect and liking. I love the feel of busy feet moving from one room to another as they share their lives and become the close friends they feel they will always be. I feel the isolation of the one who does not join in. thank you for sharing. Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]


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