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    dots Submission Name: In The Still Of The Nightdots
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    Author: iLLeGaL pLaYeR
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 5/0/4
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 634
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Title was suggested by a friend of mine. This poem was originally posted at my deviantArt page.


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    dotsIn The Still Of The Nightdots
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    Love is a passion
    But lovers turned it sour
    With their unrealistic expectations
    Years of relationship collapsed within hours

    Words are told but never turns true
    Shedding tears, the action most couples do
    Fall in love but not with their partner
    Blinded by lust leading them to disaster

    In the still of the night
    I vow to make you happy with all my might
    To be with you I won't surrender the fight
    Earth Angel, I won't let you fall to the wrong side

    I can't promise you miracles
    But I'll stand with you facing obstacles
    I can't swim seven seas to be with you
    But leaving you in aggravation is something I won't do

    You shine lights to this dark heart of mine
    Bind me with heavenly feelings no man can find
    Knowing I'm a pessimist when it comes to love
    You proved that it's a special thing sent from above

    In the still of the night, I prayed for your arrival
    Finally God have sent me the special girl
    Now it's my turn to make it happen
    This poem is the first step to our heaven.




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