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    dots Submission Name: School daydots

    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 776
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       This is kind of thrown together and personally I think the ending sucks but oh well.. This is about a day in class.. Enjoy

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    dotsSchool daydots

    You can see through the walls,
    they're made of glass.
    I take my seat,
    in front of the class.

    Silly teens,
    roaming the halls.
    Nothing is invisible,
    except for these walls.

    We all can see you,
    you're starting to fight.
    We're all so distracted,
    this isn't right.

    The teacher gets angry,
    and starts to shout.
    She breaks up the fight,
    and my classmates pout.

    "We wanted to watch."
    They all start to whine.
    Then goes the bell.
    Well I'll see you next time.

    Submitted on 2008-01-29 10:19:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    I really Love writes that bring me back to my childhood
    This write did that perfectly
    Its really kind of funny because Honestly I hated High School but for some odd reason I simply refuse to give up my youth
    Looking forward to more writes from you soon
    God Bless
    Please keep in touch!!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i can't help but laugh... that is so high school! great portrayal!
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]

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