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Potential


Author: DontLetGo421
Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118 /238 /141
Words: 36
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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Potential



Sapphires enlace into ebony widowing me to the darkness
As I lie strangled beneath the weeds silencing my protest
Golden lights spear the sky displaying fight is essential
Your response however will thus measure your potential




Submitted on 2008-01-29 13:48:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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