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    dots Submission Name: Summer's Sundots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSummer's Sundots
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    Lurking beneath the summer's sun
    The warmth entrancing my brain
    Gazing out as the waves come crashing
    Clearly showing its ascertain

    My time here has been adequate
    ...I sense its time to leave
    Bugs light up in the darkened sky
    And dance as they weave




    Submitted on 2008-01-29 13:51:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a very interesting piece... i really liked it!!
    drew
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by thedemoninside | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like it great job..!
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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