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Summer's Sun

Author: DontLetGo421
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Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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not finished..still a work in progress

Summer's Sun

Lurking beneath the summer's sun
The warmth entrancing my brain
Gazing out as the waves come crashing
Clearly showing its ascertain

My time here has been adequate
...I sense its time to leave
Bugs light up in the darkened sky
And dance as they weave

Submitted on 2008-01-29 13:51:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is a very interesting piece... i really liked it!!
| Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by thedemoninside | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like it great job..!
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