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our only remnant


Author: DontLetGo421
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Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /You left me
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our only remnant



It's astounding to me.. I'm back where I've been
Casting myself out there to soley obtain chagrin
Yet you should have witnessed my gaze into your eyes
It's bittersweet the words you said to me, such sweet lies
My aroma amongst your car will be our only remnant
In a manner the flaw is mine for granting the consent




Submitted on 2008-01-29 15:23:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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