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    dots Submission Name: I Remember Yesterdaydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 623
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 418
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    Description:
       I just feel like shit. Maybe the flu went to my head a bit... but eww, that was gross. yucky. and anyway im gonna be pissed if i have to go all the way out there. grrr.


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    dotsI Remember Yesterdaydots
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    I just want to write a story,
    With you as my inspiration,
    Now I'm stuck in desperation,
    Of my soul.
    I'm still not whole.
    You're making me cold,
    With a future untold.
    I just want you to hold,
    What I'm saving for you.
    But then who,
    Is this being,
    That I am not seeing,
    But I am still feeling,
    In you?
    Is it true?
    How will I see through this cool blue?
    How will I give you my first clue?
    And what is this poison,
    From the apple of an angel,
    That I am not getting through to?
    How will I know what to do?
    And how could you be so untrue,
    And then try to walk off in my shoes?
    When inside me I know we're not cool.
    And who's this fool,
    Whose so full of himself?
    But I'd rather stay true to myself.
    And I'm losing my romantic being,
    To a feeling that I am not seeing.
    And I'm freezing,
    In a puddle of my own tears.
    I have so many more fears.
    How long until this terror clears?
    I can't ever let you disappear.
    Now I'm stuck with these voices,
    That don't give me much choices,
    And I don't want to lose to those fools.
    But then, who am I to fear you?
    But you weren't true.
    But Peek-A-Boo,
    I still see you,
    And now I'm so confused.
    But do you want me to feel used,
    Or just abused?
    Will you, too, refuse to lose?
    Will you force me to chase you?
    Will you leave me with a fuse,
    That I'll be forced to use on you?
    Don't make me beat you?
    That's not cool.
    But who's right?
    Who's wrong?
    Whats going on?
    I wrote your song,
    And sang it well.
    How will I tell,
    The end.
    My heart won't ever mend again.
    Right now I need you as my friend,
    Until the time is right,
    To stop my fright.
    And please don't fight,
    My heart.
    And please don't leave me in the dark.
    Because I'm sure to lose my head.
    Please don't leave me for dead.
    In my heart I once said,
    "That miracles and faery tales and majick tricks arent real. This threaded spinning wheel is twirling 'round my heart so it won't fall apart and I won't feel what's so surreal."
    But now I can't see past you leaving,
    Me alone.
    You'll make me roam,
    Till I find home.
    But home is lost.
    And my death is a cost,
    That you won't see,
    But I don't want to watch you leave.
    And how could you deceive,
    This being that I'm holding all alone.
    I watched as your light shone.
    And now I'm fading into nothing,
    And I'm falling to the ground.
    Please don't make me turn around,
    To see my life flash different colors.
    And I wonder,
    Where you're going,
    Who you're taking,
    Why you're killing me inside.
    I'll lose my mind.
    I need you this time.
    Now he's leaving me forever,
    In this cold and rainy weather.
    And I'm dancing in the street,
    To see if life gives me this treat.
    But I have to get off these streets,
    And on my feet,
    And make my move.
    How long until I know this groove is true?
    Don't make me lose.
    Don't let me kill myself.
    Dont make me do this by myself.
    Don't make me run away and hide.
    Don't make me cry or tell these lies.
    Please don't let me down, I know
    That one day we could grow and show,
    The world what we own.
    And make them stars,
    Beyond our being,
    And our soul.
    And now I can't control,
    These terrors,
    That leave detours,
    In our way.
    But I remember yesterday.




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      Happy NOW Tina!!! "But I remember yesterday" - that is a good title...

    You express yourself well and one thing I notice is that you, like a lot of do or have done, rely too much on others to bring you esteem and joy.

    I know you are a wonderful young woman and that you have had many struggles and pains but you must first bring your love from within and then put it out there.

    Keep on keepin on girl!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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