you should write it out! write it in epic poetry style similar to beowulf, i could see you doing that if thats not the style you intended (which i assume is prose?)
anyhow my favorite line was the end line
"As the crescent broke his face
I knew it was my time." especially how it alludes to confrontation, like the cresent shadow of a staredown on the face of the other guy. at least thats how i saw it.
Wow, This looks to be a very promising story and I can't wait to read it if you do decide to put it to paper. Also I loved how you worded everything, it kind of reminded of Shakespeare or someone of the like. This simply fascinates me & truth be told I read it three times. The first time I was so impressed by it that I didn't really register it in my mind. The second time it registered, and the third time I fully appreciated this work of art.
Submission Name: The Guise of Fear: Part the First
