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    dots Submission Name: I Wanna Be Your Downfalldots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1835



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    dotsI Wanna Be Your Downfalldots
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    Hey...
    Can you hear me?
    I'm calling out from the corners of my mind
    I can't wait
    Till you feel me
    And discover the things that you have left behind
    There's so much more to you that will never meet their eyes
    And I just can't let another of these chances pass me by

    Let down your walls
    I wanna be your downfall
    Open up your heart
    I want to have it all
    You can be my savior
    And I can break you so exquisitely
    I wanna be your downfall,
    Drag you down with me

    Hey...
    Can't you see me?
    There was a moment when I knew you couldn't care
    But I,
    I can see you
    And I have learned that you're just so fucking scared
    There's so much more to me that you've got a chance to know
    And you're gonna regret me if you let this moment go

    Let down your walls
    I wanna be your downfall
    Open up your heart
    I'm sure I need it all
    You can be my savior
    And I can break you so exquisitely
    I wanna be your downfall,
    Drag you down with me

    You are so high
    And I want to know how it feels up in the air
    So let me try
    And I'll bring you down to earth where you will share
    Everything
    Everything
    And I will take the time to do this right

    I'll break down those walls
    I wanna be your downfall
    Open up your heart
    Let me have it all
    You can be a savior for my soul
    And I can break you so exquisitely
    Let me be your downfall
    I'll drag you down with me

    Please let me be your downfall
    I'll drag you down with me




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