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    dots Submission Name: I Love You Oh So Muchdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Written about three different people that I love deeply

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    dotsI Love You Oh So Muchdots

    You make me feel like something else
    A better version of myself
    You make me think I can do anything
    With or without your help
    You make me believe that I have the words
    When despair shatters my mind
    You make me see the things I have
    Instead of those I've left behind
    You make me trust that there is hope
    You've bathed me in your light
    And despite all the cloudy mornings,
    You are a starry night

    I love you oh so much
    You're beautiful to me
    You're so very special to my life
    More than anyone can see
    I love you oh so much
    Your spirit always shines through
    And of all the wonders in my life
    I'm so glad I get to love you

    You've been here every time you were needed
    Never afraid to jump in
    You've always made sure to state your mind
    And we always win
    You're constantly up for something new
    There's always a story to tell
    There's no mistaking the beauty in you
    And everyone's under your spell
    You're one of those kindred spirits
    And at times, you've made me mad
    But I'd be foolish if I didn't tell you
    You are the best friend I've ever had

    I love you oh so much
    You're beautiful to me
    Your heart is wild and unrestrained
    Your spirit runs free
    I love you oh so much
    And my love for you has grown
    And of all the wonders in my life
    You're the most amazing person I've ever known

    I never know what to say about you
    Your blood runs in my veins
    I want to shield you from the world
    And take away your pains
    You're such a beautiful person
    You have such an amazing mind
    You go out of your way to help so many people
    You are unbelievably kind
    We've made so many amazing memories together,
    Times I'll always miss
    And you're a fully grown woman
    But you'll always be my baby sis...

    I love you oh so much
    You're beautiful to me
    You're such a light in my darkness
    So much braver than I'll ever be
    I love you oh so much
    And time will never tear us apart
    You are one of the biggest pieces of me
    And you're always in my heart.

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      this was a lovely piece, but perhaps a bit lacking in the style and grace department. i don't know if it was charming despite the lack of form, or becuase of it. i quite liked it.
    "i love you oh so much" reminded me of a song
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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