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    dots Submission Name: I Can Rememberdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 747
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    Bytes: 1093



    Description:
       I miss my grandma


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    dotsI Can Rememberdots
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    I can remember a time when nothing mattered
    But the memories that we made
    A time when rooms were filled with laughter
    And we sat and watched the light fade

    I can remember a time when things were better
    And there was nothing to hold us back
    We spent our time concerned with what we could give
    Instead of what we would lack

    I can remember a time when words were spoken
    And photographs were taken
    Smiles were fixed upon our faces
    Before our world was shaken

    I can remember a time when we were young
    And rain always came from above
    A time for hugs and tears of joy
    And all you needed was love

    I can remember a time before we were corrupted
    Before hearts were broken
    Before bonds were torn apart
    By the things left unspoken

    I can remember a time when nothing mattered
    When life was brightened by her glow
    A time when life wasn't taken for granted
    These memories of long ago...





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      I didn't look at the description before reading this so it was kinda cool you got the point of losing someone and wishing you could still make memories with them. Although, I didn't immediatly see the connection between your grandma, I saw it almost like a wish for childhood again.
    I like how this actually rhymed well, which I don't see all the time.
    I like it, rarely ever do I enjoy rhymed pieces, mainly because they don't keep within a certian beat or rhythm, but I liked this. Good job.
    pursuitoflife
    | Posted on 2008-01-29 00:00:00 | by Pursuitoflife | [ Reply to This ]


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