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    dots Submission Name: My Inconstant Moondots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       thought about that line from Romeo and Juliet...

    "Oh swear not by the moon, the inconstant moon..."


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    dotsMy Inconstant Moondots
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    Just a tiny orb of light
    Up there in the sky
    Yet somehow, your crazy gravitational pull
    Makes me feel so high

    You rise up through the starry night
    And drag me to the sea
    I watch the waves crash on the shore
    And I feel your hold on me

    Just a tiny orb of light
    But an object of endless lore
    It demands my utter fascination
    And shakes me to my core

    You come and go in relentless cycles
    Always with an end and a beginning
    I watch you sail across the sky
    And forget the world is spinning

    But the night has come and gone
    And I hope to see you again soon
    You bathe the world in your silver light
    My inconstant moon
    -RDS-




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