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    dots Submission Name: Acid Trippindots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 333
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 416
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    Bytes: 2171



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       acid trippin. what else could i say


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    dotsAcid Trippindots
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    hallucinating off my asshole
    knowing theres no way to control
    all these things that i am seeing
    someone dosed me now im frying

    blood in my heart, slowly draining
    life in my soul, quickly fading
    and theres no time for reminding
    me that im, steadily dying
    from all of this insane frying
    but guess what, i wasnt lying

    hallucinating off my asshole
    knowing theres no way to control
    all these things that i am seeing
    someone dosed me now im frying

    i see you standing in the shadows
    as im hanging in the gallows
    and im waiting for tomorrow
    so you can dig me out of this
    shallow ground
    and when you put that shovel down
    im gonna punch you in your face
    for just watching my disgrace
    and i cant erase, my sins
    i wont let them win again
    but you be still
    while i kill you
    against your will
    and make your heart still
    just for thrills

    hallucinating off my asshole
    knowing theres no way to control
    all these things that i am seeing
    someone dosed me now im frying

    here you are
    in the dark
    making fire in the shadows of my heart
    i wont let you tear me apart
    this pain wont ever start
    because im paranoid
    that your an android
    with no emotion
    and if i launch you in the ocean
    your legs still wont stop there motion
    but this illution, isnt real
    and i feel so high
    out of my mind
    im flying in the sky
    and when i fall im sure to die
    but first lets fry

    hallucinating off my asshole
    knowing theres no way to control
    all these things that i am seeing
    someone dosed me now im frying

    frying flying, slowly dying
    mesmerized by babies crying
    terrorizing mental patients
    telling them about aliens
    taking over with hypnosis
    making them think im like Moses
    making sure they get their doses
    right before the locked door closes




    Submitted on 2008-01-30 13:35:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi long time no read or see i thought this was crazy good and the title suits the means

    hope all is good

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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