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    dots Submission Name: Miradots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 509



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    dotsMiradots
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    I see you and You see me
    Mira, we both look at each other
    I get traped in your never ending brown eyes
    And when I try to look away it seems I cannot
    Is this power you have over me
    The feeling they call love?
    How can this be?
    I was told by many
    That I could never love
    Not after last time
    After my heart was finally broken
    For good
    And now I don't even think
    That you can fiz it
    Because I know I can't




    Submitted on 2008-01-30 22:04:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this has a good plot, and it's nice, but it lacks good rhythm.
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by lechuga | [ Reply to This ]


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