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    dots Submission Name: We're All Mad Here (Draft)dots

    Author: bleeding-soul
    ASL Info:    17/m/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 94/94/14
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsWe're All Mad Here (Draft)dots

    We're all mad here
    Inside my mind
    Our talk is cheap
    Our love is blind

    We're all mad here
    Inside my heart
    We'll take your love
    We'll tear it apart

    We're all mad here
    Inside my Abyss
    We'll take your last breath
    Then seal it with a kiss

    We're all mad here
    Inside my shell
    We pretend we're in Heaven
    When we're burning in Hell

    We're all mad here......

    Submitted on 2008-01-31 12:26:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... i can't even say anything to that... it is just so true.
    thanks for a great read.
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]


    the rythem and flow.

    we are all mad here aren't we?
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by shawnaSUNSHINE | [ Reply to This ]
      So gothic, so depressing, no wonder I love it.

    This is really good. And also an orginal topic. I can honestly say I've never read a poem like this before.
    and if your thinking about adding more, do.

    | Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it to death.

    Now does the last line (with 'draft' in the title) mean you're considering adding more?

    If not, I would drop it, but that would just be out of personal taste.

    It doesn't matter though, because I still love it to death.
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by Morsketch | [ Reply to This ]
      Like I told you last night,


    I love this kind of writing.
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with blu, the flow of this piece is excellentl, and true. We all are mad. : ) Great read/write.


    O.Y. Ryoku?
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the flow and repitition of this piece. It sounds like you. Sort of like a schizophrenic mad hatter tea party.
    you did pretty well with this piece, and I enjoyed it.

    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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