Description: The style of this poem was inspired by my favorite poem i've written Sweet Poison and is about being a college student who's undecided on a major.
Pulling, squeezing
crushing as it burns
tearing at the flesh beneith
stinging with each gasp
fighting on for just one more
to get the chance
to make the choice
that will release
the cord's pressure
on the throat.
God do I know the feeling, and even when you make the decision its still hard to breathe. I love that you can squeeze some much meaning out of such a short poem, its like Orange juice concentrate... but with poems.
I'm soooo good with metaphors
Josh
Not bad, but not necesarily great either. It was good, but it was slightly hard to follow. The feelings was unclear, but it was great with the feelings such as the "stinging" and "tearing". I would say it was ok, but it could use some work.
Submission Name: Strangulation
