Stripped bare you have a beauty unseen when you're clothed,
all leanness and sinew, catlike.
Even your face changes,
for you know how gorgeous you are,
and you wanting me makes me feel
like the most beautiful thing
that has ever been.
i didnt finish my comment cause im retarted ...lol..it was supposed to say makes you feel beautiful...nomatter how you feel about yourself anyother time...but at that moment your just feeling beautiful...
this is a gret thought...clothes are defently made to fit an ideal...im liking the part where you say even your face changes...and its amazing how someone wanting you for you just how you are makes you feel beautiful...smiles ange
maybe it's just me, but i loved the description you wrote for this piece as much as the piece itself, although for very different reasons. the description shows a tolerant wisdom that only those who've served the quietest, wisest wind would know. a very excellent point. the poem was light and free of societal constraints and was just about one and another, which is so private between two that i felt slightly guilty for peering in on this meeting.
but only slightly guilty. i'm far too selfish to feel more than that. awesome write.
i absolutely adore cats! they are so sensual and, as you said, lean and sinewy, as well as graceful. and they know how gorgeous they are! they really do! i spend a lot of time watching my cats. anyway, i love this poem. it is so very sensual and catlike!
I agree with the theme of this piece. In general anyway. I'm actually a nudist at heart. This piece has hints of unbridled romanticism. But my cat is the fatest, least lean and sinewy animal I can think of. "Even your face changes" is the best line of the piece. It says the most.
This is very well done: simple, but it works, and it's beautiful. Nothing to criticise, except maybe the line 'for you know how gorgeous you are' - maybe slightly too gushing, overall it's a sweet and sensual poem. Becky
yeah wow... this is awesome... i dunno... im really not here right now but i do know that i like this alot and i fully agree with your description when you said that clothes are made for the "ideal" and not for people. this has a very magic feel to it... great write
This is so deep. You have struck at the root of how I feel so many days about so many things. In fact each time someone like you give a nice comment to one of my posts, I feel just like this. Well done. and thanks, Dave