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    dots Submission Name: Catlikedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Lately I've been stuck on the concept that even "imperfect" bodies look perfect nude because clothes are made to fit an "ideal"and not people.


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    dotsCatlikedots
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    Stripped bare you have a beauty unseen when you're clothed,
    all leanness and sinew, catlike.
    Even your face changes,
    for you know how gorgeous you are,
    and you wanting me makes me feel
    like the most beautiful thing
    that has ever been.




    Submitted on 2004-06-28 07:49:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I'm... shivering... HAHA! Excellent piece... a talk about 'forbidden' fruits. Object Of Desire. As always - short but expressive and true, authentic. Very moving. Beyond reproach, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt finish my comment cause im retarted ...lol..it was supposed to say makes you feel beautiful...nomatter how you feel about yourself anyother time...but at that moment your just feeling beautiful...
    | Posted on 2004-06-29 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a gret thought...clothes are defently made to fit an ideal...im liking the part where you say even your face changes...and its amazing how someone wanting you for you just how you are makes you feel beautiful...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-29 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      maybe it's just me, but i loved the description you wrote for this piece as much as the piece itself, although for very different reasons. the description shows a tolerant wisdom that only those who've served the quietest, wisest wind would know. a very excellent point. the poem was light and free of societal constraints and was just about one and another, which is so private between two that i felt slightly guilty for peering in on this meeting.

    but only slightly guilty. i'm far too selfish to feel more than that. awesome write.

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      i absolutely adore cats! they are so sensual and, as you said, lean and sinewy, as well as graceful. and they know how gorgeous they are! they really do! i spend a lot of time watching my cats. anyway, i love this poem. it is so very sensual and catlike!
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well done.This is so deep.In general I agree with the theme of this piece.. you are a very good write keep it up great job lia
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the theme of this piece. In general anyway. I'm actually a nudist at heart. This piece has hints of unbridled romanticism. But my cat is the fatest, least lean and sinewy animal I can think of. "Even your face changes" is the best line of the piece. It says the most.
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well done: simple, but it works, and it's beautiful. Nothing to criticise, except maybe the line 'for you know how gorgeous you are' - maybe slightly too gushing, overall it's a sweet and sensual poem. Becky
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by SugarMouse | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful poem. you have a tendency to make your poems into love poems with the last few lines lately but I really like that. this one is very sensual. very well done.
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah wow... this is awesome... i dunno... im really not here right now but i do know that i like this alot and i fully agree with your description when you said that clothes are made for the "ideal" and not for people. this has a very magic feel to it... great write
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I THINK I NEED A COLD SHOWER...

    NICELY DONE, GOOD USE FO JUST A FEW WORDS TO CONVEY A DEEP CONCEPT. :-)

    [NEED TO WRITE MORE TO SATISFY THIS MACHINE]
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so deep. You have struck at the root of how I feel so many days about so many things. In fact each time someone like you give a nice comment to one of my posts, I feel just like this. Well done.
    and thanks,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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