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    dots Submission Name: A Seasons Lovedots

    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1286
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This write is about a girl that I love very much and Im quite happy with.

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    dotsA Seasons Lovedots

    Across from school, We lay in the grass.
    I see you smile, I hear you laugh.
    A summers sun thoughout the skies,
    Shining down on hazel eyes.
    A warm nights walk through an empty street,
    Tear steaked mascara, a kiss on the cheek.
    Holding hands in an Autumns rain,
    Lips of satin still smile away.
    Tickeling matches as we fall in the leaves,
    Skin so soft, a lovers dreams.
    Halloween,with only candy in sight,
    The sweetest of sweet, still holding me tight.
    Snowflakes cascade gracefully to the ground,
    A silent I love you, hearts beat to the sound.
    Longing goodbyes, wishing you'd stay,
    Sitting alone on christmas day.
    Sleeping togethor, dreams of bliss,
    The warmth of breath on fingertips.
    Paddleboats on the lake, watching the moon,
    Reality awakening, as spring starts to bloom.
    Movies and picnics, teeter totters await.
    Watching Boy Meets World till we can't stay awake.
    Summer arrives, back in the grass,
    Here in your arms is where forever will last.
    Seasons change, days grow old,
    Memories remain as time unfolds.
    Forever and always, my angel from above,
    I now know the meaning of a seasons love.

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      This is a very, very well written poem. It reminds me of a summer fling between to people who are just crazy in love. I am not sure what else to say, you used correct punctuation, capitalization and spelling. Job very well done. Keep up the great writes.

    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]

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