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    dots Submission Name: God's Boxesdots
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    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    I have in my hands two boxes,
    Which God gave me to hold.
    He said, "Put all your sorrows in the black box,
    And all your joys in the gold."

    I heeded His words, and in the two boxes,
    Both my joys and sorrows I stored,
    But though the gold became heavier each day,
    The black was as light as before.

    With curiosity, I opened the black,
    I wanted to find out why,
    And I saw, in the base of the box, a hole,
    Which my sorrows had fallen out by.

    I showed the hole to God, and mused,
    "I wonder where my sorrows could be!"
    He smiled a gentle smile and said,
    "My child, they're all here with me.."

    I asked God, why He gave me the boxes,
    Why the gold and the black with the hole?
    "My child, the gold is for you to count your blessings,
    The black is for you to let go."
    me.




    Submitted on 2008-02-01 08:40:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Brittany, this is delightful, and is the kind of poetry we need to see more of nowadays! Your poem gives a wonderful message, and has an excellent structure, rythmn, and rhyme scheme.

    Good work, lovely lady!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      a quite ingenius piece of poetry cleverly concieved and most adroitly put together.... loved it! bravo.... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      man, this was very well done. i loved how you protrayed the whole thing. it reminded me how we can leave our sorrows in His hands and how He will take care of them. it shows how loving God is and how he wants us to be joyful, count our blessings, and not be worried!


    i jsut suggest that you leave the 'me.' one line down, because it gets a bit confusing. it makes it seem like it is supposed to be the end of the last stanza, and from what i noticed, it isnt supposed to be.

    very good job! i love the rhymes (i was never too good with rhymes...)! very nice thought! definite fav.

    -allyn
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by allyn d. | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was really inspirational! i liked every line of it and the message is one that is obvious but neat and needed in the world today! thnx for posting this, it made my day :)
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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