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    dots Submission Name: Serenity Nowheredots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1262
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    Description:
       This piece is dedicated to those who have been massacred in Lusignan, Guyana. My prayers go out to those who have lost their loved ones. I can't imagine leaving this world in such a brutal way.


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    dotsSerenity Nowheredots
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    Silence mourns
    Its sadness to my ears
    A step closer to the truth
    Until the floor stares at me
    Unable to grasp my surroundings
    The realisation that death has taken place
    And I question myself, “What is this world to be?”

    Shock sneaked in
    And took me by surprise
    By an unrealistic occurrence
    One that will be spoken of in history
    Saddened each time the word flows out
    Scratched deeply beyond no point of recovery
    “What was the reason behind your hate?” I need to ask

    Serenity nowhere
    Not to be in the air today
    For this day has been smashed
    And the pieces have been scattered
    One moment beauty seem to be created
    But all that building managed to fall apart
    My prayers go to those who are now suffering




    Submitted on 2008-02-01 15:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked how true your compassion flowed throughout this poem.

    At first I didn't like how you said

    "Shock sneaked in
    And took me by surprise"

    however it sort of grew on me; it's interesting. When something truly evil and corrupt happens, shock is sometimes delayed, even that sort of takes away from it's actual meaning. It's as if you heard of all this, and were shocked but so shocked you didn't quite grasp it, and then suddenly...you surprised at being shocked. To me that's totally incorrect wording, but with poetry there is no correct wording. See what I mean?

    I really enjoyed this piece. I hope I made some sort of sense :P


    -miss m
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes,violence of any kind grieves every loving heart . It seems that in certain countries that murder must have an atrocious disfiguring
    of a dead body before the people will take note. It is an historical fact that all humans are by their nature kind and sociable. Those wars and religious skirmishes taking place are truly works of The Evil One who knows that time is running out on his mission to keep people away from The God of Love and Mercy. The Evil One is the greatest coward the world has ever known. He gets people to do his evil works.
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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