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Serenity Nowhere

Author: charmedidentity
ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
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Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This piece is dedicated to those who have been massacred in Lusignan, Guyana. My prayers go out to those who have lost their loved ones. I can't imagine leaving this world in such a brutal way.

Serenity Nowhere

Silence mourns
Its sadness to my ears
A step closer to the truth
Until the floor stares at me
Unable to grasp my surroundings
The realisation that death has taken place
And I question myself, “What is this world to be?”

Shock sneaked in
And took me by surprise
By an unrealistic occurrence
One that will be spoken of in history
Saddened each time the word flows out
Scratched deeply beyond no point of recovery
“What was the reason behind your hate?” I need to ask

Serenity nowhere
Not to be in the air today
For this day has been smashed
And the pieces have been scattered
One moment beauty seem to be created
But all that building managed to fall apart
My prayers go to those who are now suffering

Submitted on 2008-02-01 15:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really liked how true your compassion flowed throughout this poem.

At first I didn't like how you said

"Shock sneaked in
And took me by surprise"

however it sort of grew on me; it's interesting. When something truly evil and corrupt happens, shock is sometimes delayed, even that sort of takes away from it's actual meaning. It's as if you heard of all this, and were shocked but so shocked you didn't quite grasp it, and then surprised at being shocked. To me that's totally incorrect wording, but with poetry there is no correct wording. See what I mean?

I really enjoyed this piece. I hope I made some sort of sense :P

-miss m
| Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes,violence of any kind grieves every loving heart . It seems that in certain countries that murder must have an atrocious disfiguring
of a dead body before the people will take note. It is an historical fact that all humans are by their nature kind and sociable. Those wars and religious skirmishes taking place are truly works of The Evil One who knows that time is running out on his mission to keep people away from The God of Love and Mercy. The Evil One is the greatest coward the world has ever known. He gets people to do his evil works.
| Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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