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    dots Submission Name: a moon of brass & soil to departdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa moon of brass & soil to departdots
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    shall the golden world
    crumble into new light
    & braze the milky moon
    into some brassy mist of amber?

    will my heart,
    this purplish void of mine,
    pump the solid mass
    of blood
    that i have made?

    i climbed a tree
    to find it empty
    last night.
    the tree & i
    are mirrors
    of eachother.

    i am hope,
    & i am the honest flapping
    of the world.
    i have staggered
    the cliffs
    of my own tongues.

    when i'm all melting,
    it is for her.
    strongly
    & with no fear
    of lasting wounds.

    when the sky opens,
    i am watching.
    bleed the soil of the earth
    & i will sing to you.
    i am black,
    & i am growing
    into a world
    of leaves
    & dust...




    Submitted on 2008-02-01 16:53:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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