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    dots Submission Name: the wax of the forestdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe wax of the forestdots
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    inside the word
    is the mold of being.
    it grows in the rivers
    of my eyes.

    & i have seen her eyes
    as birds do.
    these distant portals
    for the plucking.

    the skin
    of my over-darling
    is retreating.
    i have found cold
    in the wax
    of the forest
    & it is shifting.

    where my hands once were
    i find these feathers.
    at least they seem that way
    when i am sleeping.

    all we have is ourselves
    when the clock is moving
    & i am not a wolf.
    but this is a cry for help...





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      it's been a long time my dear. but oh thou hasn't lost his touch.

    "where my hands once were
    i find these feathers.
    at least they seem that way
    when i am sleeping."

    something about these lines struck me. they just seem so natural. i love it.

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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