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    dots Submission Name: Let's Get Nakeddots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 354/433/185
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 172
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       this is a rough draft. I'll probably redo it later. but you can comment now, for kicks and giggles.


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    dotsLet's Get Nakeddots
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    Let's get naked. Let's feel everything
    with our skin and not our clothes.
    Let's get close to the fibers of
    cool grass instead of stifling cotton.
    I want dirt in the crevices and
    bruises in places once protected
    by several layers of fabric.
    Let's throw away our jackets
    our denim jeans and our Converse.
    Let's forsake underwear, socks,
    toss them in a burn pile in the yard.
    I want the sun to burn freckles
    all up and down my spine,
    and I want the frigid wind
    to ripple my skin with shivers and bumps.
    In the daytime we can search the earth,
    digging through soil for treasure,
    and at night we'll sleep under blankets of snow.
    Let's go dancing with rainstorms
    and ride on the backs of Pacific waves,
    let's scar ourselves with the outside world
    and hope it digs deep into our bodies,
    needling its way into hearts and bones.
    Let's hide nothing from each other,
    nothing from ourselves,
    let's show and see and touch the things
    that are usually just out of reach.
    Let's forget our armors of cotton and mistrust.
    Let's get vulnerable before
    the great wide world in all its splendor,
    all its horrors and wonders and mysteries.
    We should take down our walls and
    rip off our shells and masks.
    We should bare our souls, our secrets,
    anything we hold sacred or shocking.
    Let's get naked. Let's feel everything
    with our skin and not our clothes.




    Submitted on 2008-02-01 20:05:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh! That was definitly inspiring if you know what I mean! Hahhaa, kidding. Great imagery in the peice & it was tastefully written, seems like you've got some great confidence. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by kickit | [ Reply to This ]
      Sexual arttttaaayyyyy oookkkkk.
    Katie you were the last person who I thought would write something like this.Wrong I was.
    5stars Snow for blankets-who wants to freeze the butt off like that? lol
    Good work.
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      BEAUTIFUL!!!

    I love it!

    This is something I desire as well...to feel with nothing but my skin...an amazing physical experience that can not even be compared to.

    You are an incredible writer.
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Kate, this has a delightful message that is told well, and with confidence and skill! Being nude in nature has been touted as being very healthy by enthusiasts since the dawn of time. But, this verse is artistic, and is very entertaining in its composure! Well done, lovely lady!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the message, you also said it so well. It is a risk to be like this, but whats life if your not living it. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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