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    dots Submission Name: oh deathdots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    " Death, Dear Death "

    Calling out at last breath


    " was it meant to have given birth "

    " on this Dear Sweet Earth "


    " Or was it a mistake? "

    " was it a mistake to take "


    " place in this world? "

    " tell me, or I will never be told "


    " on my knees I beg you to say "

    " please please , oh if you may "


    " my heart aches to the thought "

    " of who people fought "


    " about what reason any has to live "

    " should any drop of the cliff? "


    " Death Dear Death "

    whom I call with my last breath


    take my soul to the place of rest

    take it , and take care of it to the best




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      Oh wow. This is so fantastically written and deep. Ive felt like that so many times before that I can feel every word inside me like my own.
    Especially the line
    " about what reason any has to live "
    That question never has an answer I fear.
    Great write
    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-02-03 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm feeling the same way lately. thanks for the write...
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]


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