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oh death


Author: Squall Leon Hea
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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oh death



" Death, Dear Death "

Calling out at last breath


" was it meant to have given birth "

" on this Dear Sweet Earth "


" Or was it a mistake? "

" was it a mistake to take "


" place in this world? "

" tell me, or I will never be told "


" on my knees I beg you to say "

" please please , oh if you may "


" my heart aches to the thought "

" of who people fought "


" about what reason any has to live "

" should any drop of the cliff? "


" Death Dear Death "

whom I call with my last breath


take my soul to the place of rest

take it , and take care of it to the best




Submitted on 2008-02-02 10:22:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh wow. This is so fantastically written and deep. Ive felt like that so many times before that I can feel every word inside me like my own.
Especially the line
" about what reason any has to live "
That question never has an answer I fear.
Great write
-Safire
| Posted on 2008-02-03 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm feeling the same way lately. thanks for the write...
| Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]


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