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    dots Submission Name: You Aredots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    dotsYou Aredots

    The gift to show, the inner thoughts through metaphors you expose.
    Paint the picture, steer change, be a self portrayed victim of alike fate, turned victor.
    Walk in the shoes of the cursed, turn their heads with relative verse. Draw them toward you and seed their hearts, turn tides of night, make dawn of dark.
    Have them never beside you, but let them see themselves in your dance.
    Separate you muses from you, protect your heart, sacrifice selflessly, show that love is hard.
    Speak of collectivness, speak of turning the tides of repression, teach tolerance and befriend even your adversaries.
    Teach to be born each day, if you fly they will.
    You are an angel.

    Submitted on 2008-02-02 10:43:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I will like to add that this is one of your profoundest works, its each line carries deep meaning and so much inspiration.

    It is a wonderful idea to say, "turn tides of night, make dawn of dark" and "let them see themselves in your dance" True artists are just like this.

    A time comes when artist and the art become one. This kind of rare exalted state influnces the readers, followers or even casual passers by deeply. So the conclusion is really amazing,

    ... if you fly they will.
    You are an angel.

    Excellent work!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-05 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice! You are every inch a poet!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-03 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so excellent and reflective! It offers a delightful and so excellent verse of amazing and excellent philosophical advice. We are born in the image of God, and are our brother's keeper inasmuch as we influence one another, one and all! We all never know who is looking up to us, and is profoundly influenced by the way we think and the things we do!

    An excellent article that I hope many read and pay attention to, my brother in letters!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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