Common Poems Are Still Poems, Need To Be Written by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY

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Author:	WhY-dO-yOu-CrY
ASL Info:	17/F/ConnUSA
Elite Ratio:	5.51 - 131/79/78
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	135
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	676

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Ah yea, common poems (depressed, cutting, love, etc)

no offence meant for anyone, so don't say your offended.

This just means that i know some of the poems we all write are a little overused, but all i'm saying is i don't care, if it's how you feel write it.

Common Poems Are Still Poems, Need To Be Written dots

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I know these poems are anything but original,
And they are getting a little digital.
But if it's how you feel, write it out,
Instead of sitting there and giving a pout.

So what if they might not be new,
They are new to you, so go slew.
Slew those words, don't hold back,
Give a shake and welcome the black.

Feel the way you want to feel,
Don't care what other's will think or how they'll deal.
Let your soul run free,
And be the person you want to be.
Instead of being who your not, because it's just a waste,
Of living human tissue space.

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||| Comments |||
  Great one this Lass, a little fast, but a nice one.

Jamar2
| Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha. This poem was amazing. I really liked the beat, and the 'be yourself' theme. Really good. Another good work showing your creativeness!
<3 Harriet
| Posted on 2008-09-29 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
  I got the msg alright but i hope u wont mind if i fill u in with a bit of advice eh? u are at a stage that i once was with poetry. we tend to subconsciously give a lot of priority to rhyming due to which some of the things we tend to write go askew with the topic or the preceding line....
thus girl all u gotta do is write how u think and how u feel and slowly u will see they start to rhyme themselves. :)>

all in all it is a very clear poem with its meaning straightly put.....i liked the inspiration behind it...
"BE WHO YOU WANNA BE"!

-KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
-OB
:)>
| Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  The poem is a little shaky, but the idea was heard loud and clear. I like it. :D
| Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by Xillie | [ Reply to This ]
  (Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)(Y)

I was about to write a poem holding the same topic but i just couldnt find the words to say ! im more good at keeping things to myself ... im stiingy when it comes to feelings even on papers...
well im galde that someone could make it... even if its not me !!!
Great WORK !
| Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]

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