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    dots Submission Name: Fruits of Labordots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 939
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 187



    Description:
       Early morning cigarette contemplating with commuter traffic just outside the fence...a new day dawns!

    Love, Peace, Joy, Hope, Faith!!!


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    dotsFruits of Labordots
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    Fruit ripened orange
    suspended from tree
    waiting paitently
    to d
    r
    o
    p
    or 2 B
    plucked
    Life in suspended animation




    Submitted on 2004-06-28 09:36:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very creative, just like the others I have read.
    You have definately been blessed by the great Writer upstairs. Be proud of your works, for they are very very well done.
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      No, the comment box didn't let the last one stand, I had let the first two lines as you had them, but spaced r, o, and p over to line up under the D. But now I'm thinking, that is probablay exactly what you did and the way the website works wouldn't let it that way. Anyway,
    I liked it of course.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      very eecummingsish, would you consider

    waiting paitently to
    d
    r
    o
    p

    or

    waiting paitently
    to
    d
    r
    o
    p

    or even

    waiting paitently
    to d
    r
    o
    p

    but I'm not sure this box will let me format that the way I have it.
    Cheers,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great. Modern and Postmodern poetry rules! I'm sick of this moon, spoon, June crap. Be creative! I'm venting, but I love your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was different.
    Liked it. Like something that can be added on a souvenir or card. nice try and ...
    very original!
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really really creative. i dont think i have ever read anything like this. i liked it. i like the imagry. great job lia
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]


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