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    dots Submission Name: desilus chapter 7dots
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    Author: Raito
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 3/6/12
    Words: 437
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
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       Chapter 7 is here!! Yay! I hope youl ike it. it's shorter than the others.


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    dotsdesilus chapter 7dots
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    Jaiden walked out the door and into the cool night air. He gazed up at the sky, watching it as dark clouds rolled in. He clenched his fist untill his nails bit into his skin, drawing blood.

    "It's my power. I will use it to destroy everything."

    He reached deep inside himself and pulled forth the dark energy. A sudden pain burned his shoulder blades and he gasped. He heard his skin rip as two great bat wings erupted from his shouder blades.

    They flapped causing a huge breeze to blow. Cars slid across the streets and Jaiden slowly rose into the air. Anger boiled in his gut, and he was blinded by a deep hatred.

    He hurtled through the dark sky toward the church. He ignored what was happening around him. The only thing he knew was that Simon had to die.

    The church was begining to come into view. The tall white cross was peeking over the trees and buildings. He accelerated untill he was hovering over the building. His wings pulled back into him and he dropped on the roof.

    He walked over to the edge and dropped three stories to the ground. His demonic body protected him from the shock and Jaiden walked over to the door. It was locked. He walked through the galss as though it were air. He sudenly caught the scent of demons. He sniffed the air and looked up. They were upstairs.

    Jaiden walked the ground floor. He came to a staircase. One set went up and one set went down. He was about to go upstairs when an even darker aura caught his attention. It was unfamiliar. It was also coming from downstairs.

    'Strange. Something is not right.'Jaiden told himself.

    He decended the stairs slowly. The aura grew stronger. He was in the basement. Jaiden smelled blood. Human blood. He looked up at the ceiling. Someone had been drug across the ceiling. Jaiden followed the trail. He came to a large boiler room. He opened the door. There were two bodies in the room. And there were three demons feasting on them.

    They were built of black ash and hollowed eyes. One turned to Jaiden and screamed. It rose, it's body erupting in flames. Jaiden took a step back, then he smiled. Simon wasn't here, but why not trash a few demons?




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