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    dots Submission Name: Always [Mistake]dots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1004
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       At the risk of taking something from the poem, it's not completely autobiographical.

    Also, I like the title 'Always' better than 'Mistake' for the tone of the poem, but having the concept of a mistake made out of naivety attached to the poem was important to me. Which is why it seems like there's two titles.


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    dotsAlways [Mistake]dots
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    I値l never be a hater,
    I値l never be a lie,
    I値l never cry a river,
    As I wish to die.

    I値l never take a knife,
    I値l never kill myself,
    I値l never take five bottles,
    Of pills from off the shelf.

    I値l never fail that test,
    I値l never be alone,
    I値l never pick up crying,
    Or without a glance, put down the phone.

    I値l never give up trying,
    I値l never leave a fight,
    I値l never stay up restless,
    The entire endless night.

    I値l never try a substance,
    I値l never loose control,
    I値l never use a bottle,
    To heal my broken soul.

    But somewhere down the road,
    The line began to blur,
    Never became Always,
    And Always has no cure.




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      By far the best. Not only because I'm a bias on some of them, saw a few that hit a soft spot and spoke out bias and non bias, but this one is the best in light of both.
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm. I want to say something other than this work was great. So, I shall try. Ahem. I liked this poem because of it's truthful-ness. I know what this poem means. Many people say they're not going to do something, but in the end, they end up doing it anyway. My favorite part was

    But somewhere down the road,
    The lines began to blur,
    Never became Always,
    And Always has no cure.

    I loved this piece, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff. Peace and inspiration!

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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