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Always [Mistake]


Author: Morsketch
ASL Info:    21/F/TX
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 28 /26 /26
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 1803
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


At the risk of taking something from the poem, it's not completely autobiographical.

Also, I like the title 'Always' better than 'Mistake' for the tone of the poem, but having the concept of a mistake made out of naivety attached to the poem was important to me. Which is why it seems like there's two titles.


Always [Mistake]



I’ll never be a hater,
I’ll never be a lie,
I’ll never cry a river,
As I wish to die.

I’ll never take a knife,
I’ll never kill myself,
I’ll never take five bottles,
Of pills from off the shelf.

I’ll never fail that test,
I’ll never be alone,
I’ll never pick up crying,
Or without a glance, put down the phone.

I’ll never give up trying,
I’ll never leave a fight,
I’ll never stay up restless,
The entire endless night.

I’ll never try a substance,
I’ll never loose control,
I’ll never use a bottle,
To heal my broken soul.

But somewhere down the road,
The line began to blur,
Never became Always,
And Always has no cure.




Submitted on 2008-02-02 16:46:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  By far the best. Not only because I'm a bias on some of them, saw a few that hit a soft spot and spoke out bias and non bias, but this one is the best in light of both.
| Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm. I want to say something other than this work was great. So, I shall try. Ahem. I liked this poem because of it's truthful-ness. I know what this poem means. Many people say they're not going to do something, but in the end, they end up doing it anyway. My favorite part was

But somewhere down the road,
The lines began to blur,
Never became Always,
And Always has no cure.

I loved this piece, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff. Peace and inspiration!

Duv
| Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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