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    dots Submission Name: Perfectdots
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    Author: aNNmARIE
    ASL Info:    20/female/ unknown
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 85/50/19
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 758



    Description:
       Well I guess this one is pretty self explanatory. I wanted to be perfect for someone I thought was perfect. In the end it all ends up to imperfection.


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    I lied to make you happy
    To make myself look perfect
    So what if it made me feel crappy
    Because in your eyes I was perfect

    Over the years
    I let you see the real me
    I let you in on my fears
    I let you see that with out my makeup I'm no beauty

    I smoke when I stressed
    I show no emotion
    I hate getting dressed
    and I'm always uncertain

    Over time
    I tried letting you love me for me
    and now to you I'm no longer sublime
    For I'm no longer the me I lied to be

    I lied to make you happy
    To make myself look perfect
    So what if it made me feel crappy
    Because in your eyes I was Perfect




    Submitted on 2008-02-03 13:02:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very deep.....I myself let people dress me up as someone else once......I didn't last a week.
    "I have a face reaction to make-up."
    "My mom wouldn't let me wear the shirt because she thought it was inappropriate."
    I hope you keep being yourself and find friends who like.......you.
    | Posted on 2008-02-03 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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