I am Cain! by Blue Monk

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Author:	Blue Monk
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Dare I say it, "an older piece"?
With but the slightest of edit.

Three words, remember them in times of duress.

I am Cain! dots

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First to be born and first to draw blood, it is my brother's that cried out! But I am yet only mortal, forgiven by divine decree that is signed in my flesh. His hand cleft on my forehead these rays like a rising sun, the warning that God protects what he has already judged. Harm me only at your own peril.

What purpose can I now serve, condemned by my fowl deed? I'm doomed to walk the rest of my days across poisoned soil with naught but the seeds of bloodlust to spread and watch grow in this new world. That pattern set for my sons bred, what has been done will carry on. Witness then my bequest of mortality hastened through each dawn to come. Dare I even turn back to give thanks? Upon thoughts of what has been lost I dwell.

I am Cain!

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  A nice little jaunt upon a tizzy envious creature. I liked your word "bloodlust" to me it brings out the vividness of envy by a brother who thought his brother's offering was better than his.
This story was included in scripture to enhance the debauchle of Adam and Eve to show that sin breds sin. yet we can not verifiably say that Cain was not redeemed which would say that God in His mercy does not accept repentance.
| Posted on 2008-09-14 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  I am Cain!
You caught me with this one!
This is pretty powerful stuff I must admit. Very powerfully set and one short essay that comprehend a very delicate situation very aptly put. . Yes I know Cain – his laments his tragedies, his forgiveness not given and thus none received. Fortunately I stem from Seth the 3 brother and not from Cain. Quite interesting I think if you will dig into his ancestry until today to try and realise who his offspring today really may be. The same situation with Esau a similar contemporary with the same fate. Abel - Cain. Jacob – Esau. Abraham – Lot. Jesus – Lucifer.
Still a commendable piece you wrote. Add it to my favs. Keep writing we do share a common spirit though. Me thinks! Loved this.
I don’t want to make this into a Bible study, but just consider this in relationship with Lucifer been the father of Cain:
1Jn 3:12 Not as Cain, who was of that wicked one, and slew his brother. And wherefore slew he him? Because his own works were evil, and his brother's righteous.
In my denomination we believe that Cain was the son from Lucifer when he enticed Eve and had relations with her. Cain was born. No apples eaten, we believe.
Mat 3:7 But when he saw many of the Pharisees and Sadducees come to his baptism, he said unto them, O generation of vipers, who hath warned you to flee from the wrath to come?
1Jn 3:10 In this the children of God are manifest, and the children of the devil: whosoever doeth not righteousness is not of God, neither he that loveth not his brother.
Joh 8:44 Ye are of your father the devil, and the lusts of your father ye will do. He was a murderer from the beginning, and abode not in the truth, because there is no truth in him. When he speaketh a lie, he speaketh of his own: for he is a liar, and the father of it.

Keep well. JM

| Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
  Hm.
I know you've written in this way to antique the feel of the piece; and it being one of your poems, it is more than surface deep by design.
And your hint of a small edit brought my eyes to 'fowl' at once.
'Cain' in the title, and 'fowl' drawing my attention, turned my hungry mind to Raisin' Cane's chicken fingers...a local legend in fast food.
I am thoroughly distracted now.
I know you have a lot more to say in here, but I'll have to comment further after supper.
;)

| Posted on 2008-02-05 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]

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