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    dots Submission Name: mssg from my heart.dots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 10/23/52
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 94
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1732



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       I'm trying something new. I can't write poetry well, but 90% of the time i can do raps, so...aha pasty white girl is submitting a rap.


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    dotsmssg from my heart.dots
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    this song i wrote falling from my lips feeling crashing to the ground, feel'n sick in my mind. the mssg from my heart "It all falls apart" it's not like a movie. not ready for the truth. spin'n in circles wait'n for the fire, the water to swallow me whole, no time no money. I need a bost, can't reach the stars. I'm fall'n to far. Tip'n over, now shh. here-here we go, ready or not. start speaking the truth or lose it all.


    All gone, only for now. Start'n to relize the choice and road set for me. Ready to bite, sick of f-fight'n back. Always and forever, well now it's now or
    never. pull'n the sentenses from my throat and spew'n the rymes. No questions left, it's all behind. Singing and trying, should i?, would i?, could i? this is the part when i stop asking and take, take, take.

    Leave be and maybe....baby you'll see, come with me on the wild ride. Hold tight, I don't want you to get lost at night. Need'n you, keep'n you, feel'n you. sick of you, miss'n you. All i ever wanted was this chance. did i lose it? I hope you didn't choose it. My life my turn.

    my trust is sumthin u gotta earn.


    Hope'n, wait'n and pray'n. I waist my time? you stand there in a daze, wondering away the days.
    this state of mind and mssg from my heart is tearing me apart. miss'n you, love'n you, sick of you, wait'n for you. I'm left sleepy from it all. And when i lay for the remainder of darkness I'm left hopeless.

    miss'n you, this mssg from my heart is tearing me apart.




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