honestly i could really relate to this. you didnt make it clear on what type of secrets you had which i think is really cool because it makes it easier for people to relate. everyone has secrets and at the end where you said take one day at a time...that is the key to get through pretty much any situation. nice work. i look forward to reading more
The first ten lines are really great; you may need to add some similes to the first stanza but it still great.
The rest of the poem is for me out of the mood of the poem. In my own opinion they need to be replaced with lines in the mood.
You made a very good pun by the words "dark and darkness"
If that was really your first poem, that is mean that you are really talent
Well, first off "the darker it the night becomes" threw me. I didn't get what "it" was so you might want to go back on that.
I mix of hope, almost desperation is appreciated but, somehow I don't catch myself feeling this, connecting with it. That's just my opinion and of course, my life is going kinda okay so maybe that's part of it.
I don't know...I know it's one of your older poems you haven't finished, but I think you should try and complete it sometime...I think maybe the ideas would work better with a little revising.