Waiting by BlueTorcher

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Submission Name: Waiting dots

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Author:	BlueTorcher
Elite Ratio:	4.67 - 79/97/96
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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Just a little somethng I wrote in my spare time ...personally its not that good

Waiting

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Sitting here
Counting down
The seconds
Until we met

The breath
I breathe
The tears
I seek

Begin to pour
Out of me
The waiting
The gain

To me
The are
All the same
Even though

All is not
In my control
Im here
Wishing

For only
One second
Of your time
Even though

I know
Youll never be
Quite mine

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Why do you feel that way? What happened? How are you going to change it or are you even going to try? What does it feel like to wait? Where are you waiting? How can you even tell that time is passing? Why do you wish for that person you wish for, and why will they never quite be yours?

Two or three words in each line is not enough to express what you feel, at least in most cases.

You have a good start, a great start even. There are places you could go with this concept. Now, you've just got to go there!

--Jane

P.S. Sorry for the generalized unhelpfulness. It's the best I could do.
| Posted on 2010-10-24 00:00:00 | by WhatYouWill | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.