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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots

    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 79/97/96
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Just a little somethng I wrote in my spare time ...personally its not that good

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    Sitting here
    Counting down
    The seconds
    Until we met

    The breath
    I breathe
    The tears
    I seek

    Begin to pour
    Out of me
    The waiting
    The gain

    To me
    The are
    All the same
    Even though

    All is not
    In my control
    Im here

    For only
    One second
    Of your time
    Even though

    I know
    Youll never be
    Quite mine

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      Why do you feel that way? What happened? How are you going to change it or are you even going to try? What does it feel like to wait? Where are you waiting? How can you even tell that time is passing? Why do you wish for that person you wish for, and why will they never quite be yours?

    Two or three words in each line is not enough to express what you feel, at least in most cases.

    You have a good start, a great start even. There are places you could go with this concept. Now, you've just got to go there!


    P.S. Sorry for the generalized unhelpfulness. It's the best I could do.
    | Posted on 2010-10-24 00:00:00 | by WhatYouWill | [ Reply to This ]

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