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    dots Submission Name: Gone.dots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGone.dots
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    A lap dance, A lover
    the dim light, another
    late night
    her dress tight
    I wonder, above her
    The smoke on the ceiling
    and in me, I'm feeling
    I'm lifted and drifting
    her dress, I've been peeling
    off
    and shes free
    and shes down on her knees
    and I'm back in the moment
    where she wants me to be
    so I move her, and through her
    I wish that I knew her
    by morning or sooner
    I'll be gone




    Submitted on 2008-02-04 21:51:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem it has such a natural rhythem to it and tells a complete story with a shorter poem. I also really like the description of the smoke. Great Right keep on writing

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2008-02-05 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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